Friday Fictioneers – Cranberry Sauce

20 12 2012

Time for some more Friday Fiction, 100 words of fiction based on a photo prompt. If you’d like to join in, go visit Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, she’ll tell you all about it.

Copyright Scott L Vannatter

Cranberry Sauce

The first Christmas without my mother was always going to be difficult.

It’s funny what you remember. She was allergic to cranberry sauce of all things. It used to annoy me for some reason: now it’s just a fond memory.

Christmas is a time to remember those no longer with us, and to be grateful for what we have: our health, our children, the cat that wandered in one day and adopted us. She’s on the table now, nuisance thing. She just took a sniff of the cranberry sauce – and now she can’t stop sneezing.



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25 responses

20 12 2012
tedstrutz

Excellent, Dude! I thought about my mother as I read your piece.

20 12 2012
claireful

ooh yes, similar idea to mine. I really like yours – gave me the shivers.

20 12 2012
rochellewisoff

Dear Pete,
A sweet, sentimental piece. I loved the sneezing cat at the end. Coincidence or Mom incarnate?
Shalom,
Rochelle

20 12 2012
sustainabilitea

Channeling my thoughts and comments,, Rochelle. Merry Christmas, Pete.

23 12 2012
writeondude

… and a merry Christmas to you too.

22 12 2012
mari wells

I was thinking the same. Wonderful story.

20 12 2012
Tom Poet

Dude,
A nice piece on what the holidays are all about..be kind to that kitty.

Tom

21 12 2012
Swirling Turnip

I LOVED this! Mom never truly to far away.

21 12 2012
Anne Orchard

I think you might have written this about my Mum as she definitely turned up at the carol service last night. No sneezing, though. Excellent story.

21 12 2012
Sandra

Great take on the prompt. Be nice to that cat now.

21 12 2012
40again

Nice to know mum still isn’t fond of cranberry sauce!
Really liked your story, have a good Christmas
Dee

21 12 2012
Jan Brown

Charming! Very sweet twist at the end. Merry Christmas, Pete!

21 12 2012
dmmacilroy

Dear Pete,

I so believe in reincarnation and found your matter of fact cat’s tale a real winner. Well done.

Aloha,

Doug

21 12 2012
bridgesareforburning

Hi Pete,
Nice story. Mom is back for another Christmas. Sentimental and sweet, just like a holiday story should be. Ron

21 12 2012
brudberg

That was an excellent story. Good you kept the cranberry sauce for your mother to sneeze on.

21 12 2012
rich

well done. sometimes small things bug us, and we should wonder, “why?”

also, this line: “The first Christmas without my mother was always going to be difficult.”

there can only be one first christmas without mother. seems odd to have always in there because it suggests something that happens often, but perhaps it’s correct. not sure.

23 12 2012
writeondude

Thanks, Rich. It’s always nice to get some constructive comments. In order to improve our writing it’s important to get good feedback. What I was trying to achieve was; a) that she had only recently passed on, and; b) that the sense of loss is most keenly felt the first time that she is not there for Xmas, and that this feeling becomes less as time goes by. Keep the comments coming. 🙂

21 12 2012
Lora Mitchell

Every Christmas without mother will be difficult, so be sure to put cranberry sauce on the table whether it’s dinner time for not.

23 12 2012
writeondude

Would be an interesting way to keep somebody’s memory alive. Does anyone else out there have unusual objects or foods that remind them of someone they’ve lost?

22 12 2012
kz

reincarnation.. the mom still found a way to come home to her family.. lovely story..

23 12 2012
writeondude

Thank you.

22 12 2012
22 12 2012
yerpirate

A clever little story there- thanks!

23 12 2012
writeondude

Arrr, thank you kindly good sirrr!

24 12 2012
Abraham

Nicely written!

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